Fantastic stuff here! Thank you for sharing! I will include this post in a list of links for my high school students, to see what everyday writer-poets are doing!
The Lines poem was a whole lot of fun. The first one plays with me in some kind of subliminal way. I've read it three times through and each time something different jumps out.
I love how you worked with identities here. I, too, felt the poem leading me into its layers. The first line reminds me of Rumi's "I was a hidden treasure and I loved to be known."
Lines seems to draw the reader in because as you start reading it's catchy. Each line is saying something important. I was wondering where it was going to lead me. I kept reading, mesmerized, and about two-thirds through my brain started thinking some of these lines seem familiar, and yet...it took until the end for me to fully grasp what you had done and I loved it. Making When the Saints go marching in the last line in paragraph one was super powerful and provided momentum for the whole thing.
Fantastic stuff here! Thank you for sharing! I will include this post in a list of links for my high school students, to see what everyday writer-poets are doing!
Identities—
My favorites:
“I was a dusty light-bulb
dimly waiting for the flick of a switch. . .”
“I am a closed book, reading
itself to find the spell”
Lines
Loved every stanza!
A voice and a personality—you betcha !
BTY—terrific narrator!
Thanks so much, Looocinda Lou! ❤️
The Lines poem was a whole lot of fun. The first one plays with me in some kind of subliminal way. I've read it three times through and each time something different jumps out.
It's tricky that way...! Thank you for reading, Weston.
I love how you worked with identities here. I, too, felt the poem leading me into its layers. The first line reminds me of Rumi's "I was a hidden treasure and I loved to be known."
OMG to remind someone of Rumi is a first for me, and much more than I deserve! Thank you for reading the poems so generously, Ann.
I love both of these poems, thank you!
Lines seems to draw the reader in because as you start reading it's catchy. Each line is saying something important. I was wondering where it was going to lead me. I kept reading, mesmerized, and about two-thirds through my brain started thinking some of these lines seem familiar, and yet...it took until the end for me to fully grasp what you had done and I loved it. Making When the Saints go marching in the last line in paragraph one was super powerful and provided momentum for the whole thing.
Thank you for such an attentive, appreciative reading, Donna.