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LeeAnn Pickrell's avatar

I love this—and to include “aubergine” in a poem—so lovely.

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Melanie Bettinelli's avatar

The imaginary dancing paintbrush is surely a wonderful tool. I love the way you imagine carnival colors not only on the houses but in the sky itself.

However, I think if I were faced with beige walls, I would like to bribe my painter brother to deface them with a mural. I suspect that in his younger days he was something of a guerrilla graffiti artist, but now he's gone legit and mostly programs websites, but sometimes paints murals on commission. Or I suppose I could offer his services to my neighbors.

In my college days I once defaced a concrete wall with chalk offerings to the poetry gods, writing up bastardized lines of favorite poems. I was called onto the carpet by the college officials, but the chalk washed off eventually.

It is lovely when you can return to a poem that wasn't quite working and can finally see how to tweak here... and there... and finally achieve some satisfaction that maybe you've got it right. I think you have here. It dances, full of animation.

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